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The moment I felt Death courting you
my rib cage collapsed. I curled
into childhood: the strange little girl
always alone, talking to herself
on the playground, thinking she
was whispered a safe solitude
of hush-holy clouds, relieved
to slip away from mating rituals
unnoticed; a detached solitude
seeing only in shades of rock
beneath a surface any touch
or even death couldn't reach.

Listen: Love is the beginning of Truth
you were the first coup de foudre
I climbed and the last amour
out of this place. Wherever
the courtship carried you,
if ever a marriage or honeymoon,
I renounce this waiting of hope;
this solitude of celibate womb;
this misguided Magic Flute -
just to see Love embracing you
before finally surrendering
to my own destined course.

This I promise the Universe.

~

Image 'Romantic Encounter', 1864 by Mihaly von Zichy (Hungary) 1827-1906 (St. Petersburg)
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Thank you.
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You're welcome.
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sumarlegur Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I curled
into childhood
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Professional General Artist
yes
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eirol87 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haunting work! 
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you
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eirol87 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you are most welcome dear! :)
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Moombeam36 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Incredible! The words almost seem to run together, as if the speaker is forming them with the odd, tumbling swiftness in which thoughts form. The first stanza touched me with the reference to a strange, lonely child who slips away from "the mating," whispering and safe.

A well deserved DD and a new fave. :) :clap:
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you. 
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Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you.
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Karinta Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Student General Artist
Brilliant! And the image suits the poem perfectly.
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you. 

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Karinta Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Student General Artist
You're welcome.
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Tarzok Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you. 
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PierreFoisy Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Professional General Artist
Very nice, but I would remove the article LE before coup de foudre, it is not necessary in this case as you have it with the first. Keep on writing. ;0)
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
done. thank you. 
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Camerartus Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Professional General Artist
This is poetry on a high level. Well done.
Sincerely, 
A Classics Major
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you.
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XocoWilde Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013   Digital Artist
I felt like reading one of those old beautiful poems that you can't fins easily now days. Great job and so so touching.
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you. 
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VXthinkwinkXV Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your poem is breathtakingly beautiful and has me hooked from the first line. I love the powerful phase, "my ribcage collapsed," showing heartbreak and shock so simply and powerfully. 


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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you. 
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Iri91 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013
lovely!
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you. 
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SonicMasterHero Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013
Ooh...
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you.
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callme007 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you.
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Love it!! :heart:
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you. 
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Appetitive-Soul Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013
What has this to do with the Magic Flute? And the last time I looked St. Peterbsburg was not in Hungary (as one would expect since Zichy was a well-known Russian court painter).
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wreckling Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013   Writer
The bottom line is a footnote about the painter's life. He was born in 1827 in Hungary, passed away in 1906 in St. Petersburg. :)
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you.
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AquaGalaxy Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013
congrats on the DD <3<br / />
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Professional General Artist
Thank you.
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Amazing! Congrats on the DD.
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you. 
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you.
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure :happybounce:
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atram95 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Is Magnificent!! Congratulation I love it!!
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you. 
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mizzmint Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on receiving a Daily Deviation! Glomp!
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Ahavati Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you.
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mizzmint Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're very welcome :heart:
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wreckling Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013   Writer
What an incredible opening. Your writing is as breathtaking as ever.
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